Comments provided by Rafael Richards:
=> Overall this is too long, and is not as specific as it needs to be to be enforceable.
=> There are no 'consequences' for noncompliance.
=> The technical arguments are weak or fuzzy; they need much more clear statements about redaction
=> Recommend eliminating all buzzwords (Agile, etc.) and focus on actual tangible deliverables.
=> Recommend shortening, and including, in quotations, those sections that VA would consider putting in its own internal policy